Roleplay & Fanfic Advertisement Thread

Advertise your threads here!

Well then...

thanks vipera.

I'm sorry Maxx, I didn't know you were advertising an RP, it looked like you were just advertising the song mentioned.

Apparently, I didn't even notice because I never look at fanfictions or horror RP's, but there is a new Comedy Section that wasn't there earlier.

Spam? really?

when's the last time you saw me spam vipera?

I thought you were advertising just the song, and I didn't see the Comedy section. I am an Administrator, but unfortunately, people don't PM me and notify me of this kind of stuff so I know what they're talking about. I'm sorry, I should have known that was just the name of the RP.

EDIT: Actually, never, which is why I'm sorry.

it's fine.

Now I just have to re-type it.

dang it! That was a good Obama impression too!

Yeah...sorry...

Ok, let's try this again.



Address from the President of the United States of America

My American people, I come to you today to notify you of the political events that are happening in the communist country of North Korea. You see, the North Korean government has acquired a dangerous asset known as Ordinance Alpha red, known to laymen as the Unicorn.

Now, I understand, my American people, that at hearing this news, you may be fearing for the lives of you and your children, as am I. However, my American people, you should not be afraid. The United States Government is dealing with the problem with all haste, and will make sure that no harm comes to you, my American people. At the present time, do not panic, do not fear for your lives, and do not reject the music of the artist Psy. In fact, I encourage all of you, right now, to get Gangam Style!



GET GANGAM STYLE! NEW RP IN THE COMEDY SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm sorry, I do not quite understand what is going on. Could someone explain it to me?

I was advertising for my rp Get Gangam Style and Vipera thought it was an advertisement for the dance because she never saw the comedy section, so she removed it as spam.

But everything's ok now.

Alright then.

redacted.

Two lone dogs ran through the woods, silhouetted by the light of the moon. They didn't know how long they had been running. They just knew they had to get away, to warn someone. Neither could erase what the other had seen, and both of them had seen their human companions fall, right in front of them. Those that had taken care of them, their packs, their families. All of that had been taken away, by creatures so monstrous that they could be barely described. Behind them, a chorus of eerie howls rose, as their pursuer followed. Their hearts were struck with terror, and they didn't know what to do.

Suddenly, one of the dogs fell, and the other halted, turning to look back at her, "Rosie!" She looked up at him, her leg caught in a hole, twisted and badly sprained, "Don't stop, Rusty! Forget about me, just go!" She barked. The other dog didn't budge, and eventually, she growled at him. He was stunned, and finally, with one last, regretful look, took off. He kept running, and he heard her tormented cry behind him. The beasts were upon her, and she was beyond helping. He continued to flee, but could not suppress the heartbroken whimper that rose in his throat.

But something rose past the sadness: Anger. He had to stop this, he had to save others. He had to do it, for Rosie. The monsters had killed his family, and his closest friend. He felt as though his heart had been ripped out. He would find a way, somewhere, somehow, to defeat the Dire Wolves. He wouldn't let them take any more lives. Together, with other brave dogs that had witnessed such terrors, Rusty would end this terror and fear, once and for all. But where? He had to know.

A Dog's Life

replace the song with "who let the Dogs out".

...That doesn't fit the advertisement. You want a sad scene to have a happy song? I typed that while listening to the music. Trust me, it flows along with the story.

Yeah vipras right on that.

It's not that sad, really. I'm not attached to the stagnant characters, and the faceless monsters just seem generally unimpressive. I don't know how their relationship is like, and I don't feel much sympathy. Work on build up and imagery.

What can I say? It's an advertisement. I'm not good with short scenes, but it had to be brief, or who would read it?

There's no need to be defensive or make excuses, I was only telling you how you could improve. That's all.

I wasn't being defensive, or making excuses. I really do believe that advertisements should be short. It's sort of like watching TV programs. Nobody really wants commercials that last longer than they have to, or ones that seem to repeat constantly. I am traditionally more detailed in normal posts, but I kept it short because it's an advertisement, and not a genuine RP post. Normally my posts are a good length, several paragraphs, and often well-detailed. Much of what I did was simply leave what happens to the imagination, which does create interest sometimes. It can be found interesting to some, or boring to others. Nobody fits in the same category.

However, please do not take this the wrong way when I say that when you criticize or give advice to people, you can be extremely blunt, and voicing it in such a way makes people less open to your ideas. I admit it, I can be blunt in real life, because I'm not as witty, or good with words. However, online, I think very deeply about how I voice criticism, because I am aware that it can offend people. I ask people not to take it the wrong way, sometimes repeating myself, as I give it. If I can't think of something, I hold my tongue until I can reply in a proper way.

Criticism is a good thing, really, it is, but if it isn't voiced properly, there isn't a point in giving it. Doing it so suddenly, and outright saying something without considering how to avoid a negative reaction before it happens makes it difficult for people to see the reason in what you have to say. It causes you to lose the respect of others, and it damages the self-esteem and confidence of who you are criticizing. Nobody listens to someone they don't hold respect for. If you are going to give me your opinion, then don't give it and expect me to instantly react with hostility, because then I will be offended. If you give good opinions voiced properly, then you shouldn't even expect hostility in the first place. I was actually very calm. I also only write long dialogues like this when I am calm. I often have to think for extended periods to reply to your posts, because I have to get around the bluntness and try to figure out if you meant harm or not. Usually, you don't, but your tone in writing tends to leave a lot of 'if's'. Again, I'm not trying to attack you, but you need to try to work on how you voice criticism. What works for one person will not work for another.

Sugar coating advice won't do anything to help another individual. Saying "Oh that was wonderful, you could try fixing this just a wee bit, but try not to worry too much" won't be effective because the advice isn't serious. I would rather someone tell me "This is where the problem is, and here is how to fix it." Advice is only as effective as the writer takes it. You can be offended if you want, and I'm sorry if you're offended, but that won't help your writing abilities very much in the long run.

I like criticism and advice (mostly on my writing), regardless of who it's from. I would rather have someone who is generally rude but can tell me what I did wrong exactly, and exactly on how I could fix that mistake than somebody who is nicer and more vague in their criticism. That being said, I will see what I can do about being "less blunt" with my advice, but I'll have figure out how to express my advice without dancing around and beating around the bush trying not to offend somebody.

I like the irony, in any case. Nice blunt criticism. I appreciate that.

personally I think any critsism is a good think so long as its positive critsism. There are folks out there who just like to complain. And it's hard to tell those folks apart from everyone else sometimes. When I tell someone what they did wrong I tend to be quite blunt but a try to be civil when I do it. I tell them what they did wrong error by error. I break it down for them, but I don't give them the final awnser.

I do believe that "constructive criticism" is the term you are looking for.

Meh. I got constructive criticism and posative reinforcement mixed up is in my head.

I'm not saying sugar coating is good. Put's example of criticism is what I tend to prefer. You used a single word to describe my characters. It would have been better had you said that you didn't know what the monsters were, and that my characters don't really have a lot of depth to make you feel sympathy for them. I would have preferred you to describe it like that.